What is the difference between adults’ and children’s happiness?
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It is usually easy for children to find happiness in their everyday lives. They easily laugh and make happy smiles in their faces. Even when they are on their way to kindergarten or school with their parents, they just become happy for minor reasons. On the other hand, grown-ups intentionally need to go somewhere, eat something or be with someone in order to be pleased. Some even use sarcastic words to comedians trying to make people laugh for good intentions. So, we sometimes need to learn from children how to be happy.
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Nice thoughts! I definitely agree with you. That\'s why most advise would say that we must learn from kids on how to be happy. Because even the simplest things satisfies them and makes them happy! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
>>CORRECT
They easily laugh and make happy smiles in their faces.
>>CORRECT
Even when they are on their way to kindergarten or school with their parents, they just become happy for minor reasons.
>>CORRECT (or you can say..for simple reasons.)
On the other hand, grown-ups intentionally need to go somewhere, eat something or be with someone in order to be pleased.
>>CORRECT
Some even use sarcastic words to comedians trying to make people laugh for good intentions.
>>Some even use sarcastic words just like comedians do just to make people laugh. OR
>>Some comedians would make people laugh at the expense of others.
So, we sometimes need to learn from children how to be happy.
>>So, we need to learn from children on how to be happy.
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