What is the importance of being member of an organization?

I think there are two important things of being a member of an organization. First, if I am member of an organization, I can feel comfortable and don\'t feel isolated. The other word, I can feel a sense of belonging. This feeling is very important because we are human beings who are social animals. We can\'t live without each other. Second, I can get many useful information from the organization. This information help me to decide something wisely. Also, I can widen my thinking from talking to others. It is hard to be in other\'s shoes. Nevetheless we can understand the perspective of another person by talking.

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What is the importance of being member of an organization?

I think, there are two important things of being a member of an organization.

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or>>In my view, two things can be important if you are a member of an organization.

First, if I am member of an organization, I can feel comfortable and I don\'t feel isolated.

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or>>The first thing is, I will be much more comfortable and not very isolated, if I belong to an organization.

The other word, I can feel a sense of belonging.

>>In other words, I can feel a sense of belonging.

This feeling is very important, because we are human beings, who are social animals.

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or>>Having this kind of feeling is very important, since we are social animals as part of the human kind.

We can\'t live without each other.

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or>>We are not meant to live without other people.

or>>We cannot live alone.

Second, I can get many useful information from the organization.

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or>>The second thing is, I have access to myriads of useful information from the organization.

This information help me to decide something wisely.

>>This information helps me to decide something wisely.

Also, I can widen my thinking from talking to others.

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or>>Also, I can broaden my mind just by talking to others.

It is hard to be in other\'s shoes.

>>It is hard to be in another person\'s shoes.

Nevetheless we can understand the perspective of another person by talking. 

>>Nevertheless, we can understand the perspective of another person by talking to them.