What is the importance of being updated with the news?
학생이 쓴 원문
Today, the world are developing many social networks. So, all of the informations were spreaded during the fast time. it is important that fast updated with the news. First, we are required to help them. if I were in a difficult situation, I updated in the internet. so, I can inform the news. Second, the government often to prevent updated bad incidents about a high position. These things are spreaded for social networks. The public people know that.
강사 첨삭
Hey, Clara. ^^ Great job for keeping up with your homework. I appreciate the hard work you have put into to. Continue to take note of the corrections I made. Talk to you tomorrow. ~ teacher Jane @@
Today, the world are developing many social networks.
>>> Today, the world is developing and there are many social networks.
So, all of the informations were spreaded during the fast time.
>>> So the information is spread in a short period of time.
it is important that fast updated with the news.
>>> It is important to keep up with the news.
OR>>> It is important to be updated with the news.
First, we are required to help them.
>>> CORRECT =)
if I were in a difficult situation, I updated in the internet. so, I can inform the news.
>>> If I were in a difficult situation, I get updated by going online and I get informed with the news.
Second, the government often to prevent updated bad incidents about a high position.
>>> Second, the government prevents controversial news about high-ranking officials from being published.
These things are spreaded for social networks.
>>> These things are spread all throughout social networks.
The public people know that.
>>> The public should know that.
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