What is the importance of having time with your family?

2021-03-17 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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It is important to spend time with family. Because it makes us feel better by talking about that we haven\'t talked about before. I usually don\'t have time, so I can\'t talk to my family well. Instead, my family and I often talk when we go on a family trip together .If i active with my family, watch, and talk while eating, i feel better , As a result, spending enough time with your family seems to be mentally helpful.

강사 첨삭

Hi Steve! I agree with you. Nothing gives us more comfort than spending time with our family. We usually underestimate it but it\'s actually a very therapeutical thing to do. :)

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It is important to spend time with family. Because it makes us feel better by talking about that we haven\'t talked about before.
>> It is important to spend time with family because it comforts us especially by talking about things we haven\'t talked about before.

I usually don\'t have time, so I can\'t talk to my family well.
>> I usually don\'t have spare time, that\'s why I don\'t talk with my family that much.

Instead, my family and I often talk when we go on a family trip together .
>>Instead, my family and I often talk when we go on trips together .

If i active with my family, watch, and talk while eating, i feel better ,
>> If I\'m more active with my family, we usually watch, talk and eat together which makes me feel better.

As a result, spending enough time with your family seems to be mentally helpful.
>>CORRECT

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