What is the importance of having time with your family?
학생이 쓴 원문
I think it is very important to spend time with my family. because we have blood relation. when we fight each other about something, we can\'t cut our relation easily. I don\'t know why but as least I can\'t do it. when you lose your family, you\'ll probably mad and regret them. so if they are alive, do your best to take care of them
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! I agree with you. Nothing gives us more comfort than spending time with our family. We usually underestimate it but it\'s actually a very therapeutic thing to do. :)
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I think it is very important to spend time with my family. because we have blood relation.
>> I think it is very important to spend time with my family because are related to one another.
when we fight each other about something, we can\'t cut our relation easily.
>> When we fight each other about something, we can\'t just cut our relation that easily.
I don\'t know why but as least I can\'t do it.
>>>I don\'t know why but I know I can\'t.
when you lose your family, you\'ll probably mad and regret them.
>>When you lose your family, you\'ll probably get mad and regret it.
so if they are alive, do your best to take care of them
>> So as long as we are alive, we need to do our best to take care of them.
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