What is the influence of smoking on health?

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I watched a 20 mins- u tube video to write for this topic.

>> I watched a 20-minute video on YouTube to write about this topic.

I just used to know roughly about the bad influence of our body.

>> I only have a slight idea on the bad effects of smoking on our bodies. 

Through this video, I learned reasons and precise symptoms.

>> Correct

I will tell you some of them which I feel shocked from and is kind of new to me.

>> I will tell you some things that shocked me and which are new to me.
Smoking weakens the immune system.

>> Correct

It reduces antibodies and immne cells.

>> It reduces antibodies and immune cells.

It damages elasticity of our skin.

>> It damages the elasticity of our skin.

It can bring premature wrinking and sagging under your eye , a poor skin tone and hair loss.

>> It can bring about premature wrinkling and sagging under our eyes , a poor skin tone and hair loss.

First of all, the most shocking thing is these effects are not reversible.

>> First of all, the most shocking thing is that these effects are not reversible.

The possible solution to limit their severity is quitting smoking.

>> The possible solution to limit their severity is to quit smoking.
In reproductive system, it causes infertility : Ovulation damage, drmatically lowering sperm count and erectile dysfunction.

>>  In the reproductive system, it causes infertility: Ovulation damage, dramatically lowered sperm count and erectile dysfunction.

Also it weaken your bones , makes your blood thicker, destry lung tissue,

>> Also it weakens your bones , makes your blood thicker and destroy lung tissues.

can alter the DNA of your cells resulting in a cancerous cell, damage your sense of taste, make your hair smell and stain your fingernails, encourage high cholesterol

>> It can also alter the DNA of your cells which can lead to cancer, damage your sense of taste, make your hair smell and stain your fingernails and it can also cause high cholesterol.