What is the longest journey you have ever experienced?

2015-04-24 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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I remember when I traveled to Latin America, the flight time was more than 20 hours including transit time. There was no non-stop flights and it had to make a stop in New York or Seattle along the way. Flying such a long time was disastrous. Especially when we fly coach for long hours and sit by a window, we could be at greater risk because in that location we are more likely to remain immobile for long stretches of time than we would if we were on the aisle. During this long flight, we could experience leg swelling, a very common problem known to occur when sitting inactive for many hours in a confined environment. If we ride in the economy class were seating keeps legs cramped and unable to move. On a plane, we cannot sleep, neither take a rest because of loud engine noise, bad air quality, and lower humidity in the cabin. It is good for me to fly 4 to 5 hours. If it takes longer than that, it is certain that I feel stressed and the travel will become a painful experience.

강사 첨삭

I admire you for doing your essay.

I hope that you will have a great time tonight and this weekend.

Thank you for sharing your opinions about the topic.

I hope to go to Latin America too.

But of course, I prefer to visit Korea than the U.S.

Talk to you soon.

Teacher Nina


I remember when I traveled to Latin America, the flight time was more than 20 hours including transit time.

>> correct

There was no non-stop flights and it had to make a stop in New York or Seattle along the way.

>> correct

Flying such a long time was disastrous.

>> correct

Especially when we fly coach for long hours and sit by a window, we could be at greater risk because in that location we are more likely to remain immobile for long stretches of time than we would if we were on the aisle.

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>> OR: Especially when we fly for long hours and sit by a window, we could be at greater risk because in that location we are more likely to remain immobile for long stretches of time than we would if we were on the aisle.

During this long flight, we could experience leg swelling, a very common problem known to occur when sitting inactive for many hours in a confined environment.

>> correct

If we ride in the economy class were seating keeps legs cramped and unable to move.

>> Did you mean: If we ride in the economy class were are seating, it keeps our legs cramped and unable to move.

>> OR: If we ride in the economy class were are seating, we will experience leg cramps because we are unable to move.

On a plane, we cannot sleep, neither take a rest because of loud engine noise, bad air quality, and lower humidity in the cabin.

>> correct

It is good for me to fly 4 to 5 hours.

>> correct

>> OR: It is good for me to fly for four to five hours.

If it takes longer than that, it is certain that I feel stressed and the travel will become a painful experience.

>> correct

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