What is the longest time you have been away from home? Did you feel homesick?

2022-12-20 · 첨삭 강사 Caitlyn

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I have been staying with my family after I was born. I even go to elementary school everyday with my mother because she was a librarian in the same school. But, because I had to go to university in Seoul, I began to live alone in Seoul. That was the first time when I have been away from home. I was depressed because of the changed mood. My house was always filled with my family\'s small talking and my dog welcomed me whenever I came back home. However, my house in Seoul was small,dark and silent. I realized I feel much loneliness than others. Especially, there were few friends around my house in Seoul because of covid-19. That\'s why I tried to go to my hometown twice a month. Next year, I will go to America as an exchange student and stay there about 5 months. It will be the longest time that I can\'t see my family. I am worried that I will get homesick. There is no one can help me and I can\'t visit my hometown whenever I want. I hope that I will adapt to the new circumstance.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Mary!
Thank you for doing your homework. I know you can do it. Living in another country is hard but instead of looking at it that way, I think it will be better if you will just enjoy the opportunity that was given to you and might as well make the most of your 5-month stay in America.
-T. Caitlyn
I have been staying with my family after I was born. 
>> I have been staying with my family since I was born. 
I even go to elementary school everyday with my mother because she was a librarian in the same school. 
>> I even go to my elementary school with my mother every day because she was a librarian in the same school. 
But, because I had to go to university in Seoul, I began to live alone in Seoul. 
>> But because I have to go to a university in Seoul, I began living there alone.
That was the first time when I have been away from home. 
>> That was the first time that I have been away from home. 
I was depressed because of the changed mood. 
>> I was depressed because of the change in environment.
My house was always filled with my family\'s small talking and my dog welcomed me whenever I came back home. 
>> CORRECT
However, my house in Seoul was small,dark and silent. 
>> CORRECT
I realized I feel much loneliness than others. 
>> I realized I felt lonelier than others.
Especially, there were few friends around my house in Seoul because of covid-19. 
>> Especially because I only have a few friends around my house in Seoul because of Covid19.
That\'s why I tried to go to my hometown twice a month. 
>> CORRECT
Next year, I will go to America as an exchange student and stay there about 5 months. 
>> Next year, I will go to America as an exchange student and stay there for about 5 months. 
It will be the longest time that I can\'t see my family. 
>> CORRECT
I am worried that I will get homesick. 
>> CORRECT
There is no one can help me and I can\'t visit my hometown whenever I want. 
>> There is no one to help me and I can\'t visit my hometown whenever I want. 
I hope that I will adapt to the new circumstance.
>> >> CORRECT

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