What is the main problem faced by your hometown?
학생이 쓴 원문
My hometown is a city there\\\'s gradually developing, so there are many shopping malls and apartments. Hence, my hometown people were stuck in a traffic jam. When I went to school in the morning, my parents drove me to school by a car, but there was extreme traffic jam. So, I
was late for school. Therefore, I think the main problems in my hometown is great traffic jam.
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Hi, Sally!
Thank you for answering the question. Let\'s discuss it later in the class. Please check my suggestions and correction below! See you in a while ^_^
~T. Roanne ^^
1. My hometown is a city there\\\'s gradually developing, so there are many shopping malls and apartments.
>>My hometown is a city that\'s gradually developing, so there are many shopping malls and apartments.
2. Hence, my hometown people were stuck in a traffic jam.
>> Hence, my hometown\'s people are usually stuck in a traffic jam.
3. When I went to school in the morning, my parents drove me to school by a car, but there was extreme traffic jam.
>> When I go to the school in the morning, my parents usually drive me to school by a car, but there is usually an extreme traffic jam.
4. So, I was late for school.
>> Sometimes, I was late for school.
5. Therefore, I think the main problems in my hometown is great traffic jam.
>>Therefore, I think the main problem in my hometown is the heavy traffic jam.
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