What is the meaning of \"success\" to you?

2020-02-13 · 첨삭 강사 Eve

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I think A lots of meaning into Success in the world. Some people could thought success is being a millionaire or being a high class. Well, I agree a little bit, those things are making comfortable for our life. But the way i see that success meaning is inner peace. even they have a lots of money or power, if their mind feeling anxious or suffering, it has nothing to meaning. I just want to emphasize that we need to balance to everything and The harmony is most important thing that i think. all factor connected, if someone have depression or anger in their mind, it will coming out from their face expression or acting. we should started smallest things. This is the first step, we are going to recognize and check our body and mind. after then we\'ll move forward step by step. I think success seems like stair to sky, it is linked all together and even though it\'s feel like too high, if we keep enduring and coming up. finally we\'ll be able to find something covered in cloud

강사 첨삭

I definitely agree with your point, [이름] [이름].

Inner peace would equal success.

Thank you for your insights today!

~Teacher Eve.

I think A lots of meaning into Success in the world.

>> I think there\'s a lot of meaning of success in the world.

Some people could thought success is being a millionaire or being a high class.

>> Some people thinks success is about being a millionaire or being a high class.
 Well, I agree a little bit, those things are making comfortable for our life. 

>> Well, I agree a little bit, those things are what makes our life comfortable.
 But the way i see that success meaning is inner peace.

>> But the way I see it, success means inner peace.

even they have a lots of money or power, if their mind feeling anxious or suffering, it has nothing to meaning.

>> Even if they have a lot of money or power, but their mind is suffering or feeling anxious, it has no meaning.  
 I just want to emphasize that we need to balance to everything and The harmony is most important thing that i think.

>> I just want to emphasize that we need to balance to everything and harmony is most what\'s most important, I think.
 all factor connected, if someone have depression or anger in their mind, it will coming out from their face expression or acting.

>> All factors are connected, if someone has depression or anger in their mind, it will come out on their facial expression or actions.
 we should started smallest things. 

>> We should start on the smallest things.
 This is the first step, we are going to recognize and check our body and mind. after then we\'ll move forward step by step.

>> This is the first step, we are going to recognize it by checking our body and mind. Then we\'ve be able to move forward step by step.
 I think success seems like stair to sky, it is linked all together and even though it\'s feel like too high, if we keep enduring and coming up.

>> I think success is like a stairs to the sky, it is all linked together, and even though it may feel too high, if we keep enduring we will go up.
 finally we\'ll be able to find something covered in cloud

>> Finally, we\'ll be able to find something that is covered in the clouds.

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