What is the most difficult obstacle you have ever encountered?

2016-05-09 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

학생이 쓴 원문

The most difficult obstacle we often face in our lives is the weak physical condition due to illness. When I was younger, I listed such obstacles as lack of my will, poor financial conditions, lack of support by my family, etc. However, as I’m getting older, I begin to realize that all of the others factors other than my health are just excuses that can be overcome if I’m determined and strong enough not to give up in the way. Even if you are poor, you can try to enter good college by seeking financial aids from various organizations or at least rely on tuition loan in the worst case if all your attempts fail. However, if you suffer from chronic illness and lie on the hospital bed, you are not able to think of others. Even your brain won’t work as you used to be, so the only thing you can wish is recovering your health. I’m now experiencing various problems with my body: deteriorated vision, pain in my knees and back, etc. I can see my immune system doesn’t work well.

강사 첨삭

Happy Monday, Sir [이름]!

How are you? How was your weekend?

You are right, health is wealth.

I do understand how you feel.

I know that you are doing your best to stay healthy.

I guess we just need to find some time to exercise and always eat a balanced diet.
See you in class.

Teacher Nina

The most difficult obstacle we often face in our lives is the weak physical condition due to illness.

>> correct

When I was younger, I listed such obstacles as lack of my will, poor financial conditions, lack of support by my family, etc.

>> correct

However, as I’m getting older, I begin to realize that all of the others factors other than my health are just excuses that can be overcome if I’m determined and strong enough not to give up in the way.

>> correct

Even if you are poor, you can try to enter good college by seeking financial aids from various organizations or at least rely on tuition loan in the worst case if all your attempts fail.

>> correct

However, if you suffer from chronic illness and lie on the hospital bed, you are not able to think of others.

>> correct

Even your brain won’t work as you used to be, so the only thing you can wish is recovering your health.

>> correct

I’m now experiencing various problems with my body: deteriorated vision, pain in my knees and back, etc.

>> correct

I can see my immune system doesn’t work well.

>> correct

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