What is the most difficult product you ever sold?
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Dear [Name],
I think Hematology instrument was difficult. Do you know that?
Hematology is blood test for Cell counts. For example, Red cell, White cell, Platelet and so on.
My company was a distributor of Horiba Medical in Korea. Horiba was not famous in our business.
So, we must compete against the high level company. For example Sysmex, Beckman coulter, Abbott...
In sales of Hospital, Name value is very important point to choice instrument. so I should have suggested low price than competator.
but I took a win in big instrument order against competitor. My boss gave a grate thanks to me. but it was impossible to change ours.
After domostration, our instrument did not work nomally. so our company withdrawered our instrument from the hospital.
I think, it was very bad remember to me. I apolozy to my customer and our staff. after that time, I resigned that company.
I could not sell that instrument to my customer.
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Your composition is highly appreciated. You did great in composing your answer. There maybe some mistakes, but that\'s okay since you are still learning.
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Here are your corrections:
I think Hematology instrument was difficult.
>> I think Hematology instrument was the most difficult to sell.
Do you know that?
>> CORRECT
>> A Hematology instrument is a blood test for cell counts.
For example, Red cell, White cell, Platelet and so on.
>> CORRECT
>> CORRECT
Horiba was not famous in our business.
>> CORRECT
>> So, we must compete against higher levels of company.
For example Sysmex, Beckman coulter, Abbott...
>> CORRECT
>> In terms of sales in a hospital, the value of name/brand is very important when it comes to choosing an instrument.
so I should have suggested low price than competator.
>> So, I should suggest a lower price than our competitor.
>> But, I took a win from a big instrument order against my competitor.
My boss gave a grate thanks to me.
>> My boss was very grateful to me.
But it was impossible to change ours.
>> CORRECT
After domostration, our instrument did not work nomally. so our company withdrawered our instrument from the hospital.
>> After demonstration, our instrument did not work properly so our company withdrew our instrument from the hospital.
I think, it was very bad remember to me.
>> I think, it was a very bad memory for me.
I apolozy to my customer and our staff. after that time, I resigned that company.
>> I apologized to my customer and our staff at that time and then I resigned from the company.
I could not sell that instrument to my customer.
>> CORRECT
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