What is the most exciting thing you have ever done?

2021-08-31 · 첨삭 강사 Angelica

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Twelve years ago, I belonged a soccer team. The team participated a soccer tournament. I scored one goal at first game. After getting one goal, I felt a thrill from toes to the head. I couldn\'t see clearly for a while. I can remember at that instant as now. Even if we lost the game. it was fantastic memory for me.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]ny, 
Thank you for sharing this memory with me. Scoring a goal in soccer is truly an exciting experience because it can be quite rare. Congratulations on scoring this goal (even if it was 12 years ago ^_^ ) 
Regards,
T. Angelica 
Twelve years ago, I belonged a soccer team. 
>> CORRECT. 
OR >> Twelve years ago, I was part of a soccer team. 
The team participated a soccer tournament. 
>> The team participated in a soccer tournament. 
I scored one goal at first game. 
>>I scored one goal during the first game. 
After getting one goal, I felt a thrill from toes to the head. 
>> ... I felt a thrill from my toes to my head. 
I couldn\'t see clearly for a while. 
>> CORRECT. 
I can remember at that instant as now. 
>> I can remember that instance even until now. 
Even if we lost the game. it was fantastic memory for me.
>> CORRECT, but remember to use a comma (,) instead of a period (.) 
>> Even if we lost the game, it was a fantastic memory for me. 

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