What is the most famous place for tourists in your country?
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I think the most famous place for tourists is Jeju island in my country. Although it’s just a small island, there is a lot of things to enjoy there. First, there is a lot of beautiful places like the sea, mountain, and forest around there. We can enjoy being with nature and see a lot of rape flowers on the field in spring. There is also famous and delicious food a lot there so we can enjoy what we want. The famous fruit in Jeju is mandarin oranges and we can see them or juice that was made of them easily anywhere. We also enjoy fresh seafood because it’s located near the sea. My favorite food in Jeju is bracken’s spicy soup. I know the most famous restaurant that sells it and there is always a long waiting line in front of there. Lastly, we can ride carts and cruise ships and visit various museums and tourist attractions. However, you have to be careful wind. Jeju’s wind is always too tough. Your hair seems crazy when you take some pictures. I always grab my hair for photos.
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Thank you for this [이름]. yes, I have heard of Jeju Island a lot and it does seem like a nice place to visit.
I think the most famous place for tourists is Jeju island in my country.
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>>> OR: I think the most famous place for tourists in my country is Jeju Island.
Although it’s just a small island, there is a lot of things to enjoy there.
>>> Although it’s just a small island, there are a lot of things to enjoy there.
First, there is a lot of beautiful places like the sea, mountain, and forest around there.
>>> First, there are a lot of beautiful places like the sea, mountain, and forest around there.
We can enjoy being with nature and see a lot of rape flowers on the field in spring.
>>> We can enjoy being with nature and see a lot of rare flowers on the field in spring.
There is also famous and delicious food a lot there so we can enjoy what we want.
>>> There are also a lot of famous and delicious food there so we can enjoy what we want.
The famous fruit in Jeju is mandarin oranges and we can see them or juice that was made of them easily anywhere.
>>> The famous fruit in Jeju is mandarin oranges and we can see them or the juice that was made of them easily anywhere.
We also enjoy fresh seafood because it’s located near the sea.
>>> correct
My favorite food in Jeju is bracken’s spicy soup.
>>> correct
I know the most famous restaurant that sells it and there is always a long waiting line in front of there.
>>> correct
Lastly, we can ride carts and cruise ships and visit various museums and tourist attractions.
>>> correct
However, you have to be careful wind.
>>> However, you have to be careful of the wind.
Jeju’s wind is always too tough.
>>> correct
Your hair seems crazy when you take some pictures.
>>> correct
I always grab my hair for photos.
>>> correct
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