What is the most important factor to consider when choosing a career path?

2021-03-24 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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The utmost factor is the job would bring a sense of accomplishment. I have prioritized compensation over other elements in the past. Accordingly, I have sought the job with the highest salary. However, I have soon lost motivation and started complaining, which has hampered the growth. Eventually, I have decided to resign and seek new opportunities, which require a lot of time and effort. It is considerably hard to balance between what I like and what I can do best. Alongside this, some career experts say that people could face a dilemma and fall into a vicious cycle by pursuing self-fulfillment because they could be a considerable gap between reality and initial thought. Nevertheless, I believe doing the job that could bring self-achievement would make people endure their work\'s pain.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for this Aciel. Our priorities in choosing a job definitely change depending on time and situation. 
- T. Beth

The utmost factor is the job would bring a sense of accomplishment. 
>>> correct
>>> OR:  The utmost factor is the  sense of accomplishment the job has to offer.   
I have prioritized compensation over other elements in the past. 
>>> correct   
Accordingly, I have sought the job with the highest salary. 
>>> correct   
However, I have soon lost motivation and started complaining, which has hampered the growth. 
>>> correct   
Eventually, I have decided to resign and seek new opportunities, which require a lot of time and effort. 
>>> Eventually, I have decided to resign and seek new opportunities which required a lot of time and effort.   
It is considerably hard to balance between what I like and what I can do best. 
>>> correct   
Alongside this, some career experts say that people could face a dilemma and fall into a vicious cycle by pursuing self-fulfillment because they could be a considerable gap between reality and initial thought. 
>>> correct   
Nevertheless, I believe doing the job that could bring self-achievement would make people endure their work\'s pain.
>>> correct   

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