what is the most important feature of the Internet?
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Development of the internet has been changed our life pattern. One of the most incredible invention is email. When we sent a mail to someone there was no wonder that we had to wait for reply mail from the receiver. However, we can check it any time in any where and send reply right after we receive it. There is no time consumption in regard to mails. I think work efficiency has been improved a lot that can\'t compare with any era. It makes us communicate with someone who I haven\'t seen before and I will not meet them one day. We can check all the life if somebody upload his/her life on SNS. All people have right to access the information if the owners agree me to access their SNS. The information in the web pages and SNS are more powerful than conventional news paper and TV show.
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Hello, Mr. [이름]! How\'s your day? I hope you and your family have a safe day tomorrow.
Thank you for your ideas. We can discuss this more in class. Call you on Wednesday! ^_^~T.Avery
Development of the internet has been changed our life pattern.
>> The development of the internet has changed our life pattern.
One of the most incredible invention is email.
>> One of the most incredible inventions is the email.
When we sent a mail to someone there was no wonder that we had to wait for reply mail from the receiver.
>> When we send a mail to someone, there is no wonder that we had to wait for the reply mail from the receiver.
However, we can check it any time in any where and send reply right after we receive it.
>> CORRECT
There is no time consumption in regard to mails.
>>There is no time consumption regarding mails.
I think work efficiency has been improved a lot that can\'t compare with any era.
>>I think work efficiency has been improved a lot which can\'t be compared with any other era.
It makes us communicate with someone who I haven\'t seen before and I will not meet them one day.
>>It makes us communicate with someone who we haven\'t seen before and will probably not even meet in the future.
We can check all the life if somebody upload his/her life on SNS.
>>We can check one\'s life whenever somebody uploads his/her pictures on SNS.
All people have right to access the information if the owners agree me to access their SNS.
>>All people have the right to access certain information if the owners agree to it.
The information in the web pages and SNS are more powerful than conventional news paper and TV show.
>>CORRECT
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