What is the most important key to maintain a happy life?

2017-05-01 · 첨삭 강사 Glenda

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I think there are three key point to maintain a happy life. First, physical and mental health are maintained in their family. Second,after challenge and do the best, thanking the situation and adaptaion. Third, one live for oneself and others.

강사 첨삭



  Hi Maria! ^^


Welcome back to Monday! ^^


Since we are talking about happiness, I hope

your long weekend and these coming holidays will make happy to

spend with your family and relax. Thank you for the homework.


See you in class ^^


Teacher Glenda


Here are my corrections:

I think there are three key point to maintain a happy life.

>> I think there are three key points to maintain a happy life.
 First, physical and mental health are maintained in their family.

>> Correct

or

>> First, Physical and mental health of the family should be maintained.
 Second,after challenge and do the best, thanking the situation and adaptaion.

>> Second, after every challenges and doing your best, you have to thank the situation and adaptation.
 Third, one live for oneself and others.

>> Third, one should live one\'s self and others.

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