What is the most important lesson you have learned since you had a daughter?
학생이 쓴 원문
I have learned the preciousness of time from my daughter since I had a daughter. Before I had a daughter, I had a hard time to adjust in USA. I was depressed seriously. I didn\'t live with the joy and peace that God gave me. I complained to God many times because I didn\'t like my circumstances. I walked by myself with my tears around Washington DC for a long time. I felt very lonely. And also, I have lost the meaning of life that God allowed me. Han was very busy at the same time. Every day I\'ve wasted my time without a plan because of depression. However, I realized what is the most important in my life after I gave birth to my daughter. Sometimes I imagine that If I could turn back to the past, I would study hard with passion. Because I don\'t have enough time and physical energy now to study English and counseling. However, I\'m very happier now than mine in the past. Because I got the motivation to grow in life from my daughter. My purpose in life relates to my daughter closely. :)
강사 첨삭
This is such a lovely realization, Jane! I am happy you got through your depression and happier now with your life.
-Faith-
I have learned the preciousness of time from my daughter since I had a daughter. >> I have learned the preciousness of time from my daughter since I had her.
Before I had a daughter, I had a hard time to adjust in USA.
>> Before I had my daughter, I had a hard time to adjust in the USA.
I was depressed seriously.
>> CORRECT
I didn\'t live with the joy and peace that God gave me.
>> CORRECT
I complained to God many times because I didn\'t like my circumstances.
>> CORRECT
I walked by myself with my tears around Washington DC for a long time.
>> I walked by myself with my tears around Washington, DC for a long time.
I felt very lonely. And also, I have lost the meaning of life that God allowed me.
>> I felt very lonely and I lost the meaning of life that God allowed.
Han was very busy at the same time.
>> CORRECT
Every day I\'ve wasted my time without a plan because of depression.
>> CORRECT
However, I realized what is the most important in my life after I gave birth to my daughter.
>> However, I realized what the most important thing in my life is after I gave birth to my daughter.
Sometimes I imagine that If I could turn back to the past, I would study hard with passion.
>> Sometimes, I imagine that if I could turn back time, I would study hard with passion.
Because I don\'t have enough time and physical energy now to study English and counseling.
>> I do not have enough time and physical energy now to study English and counseling.
However, I\'m very happier now than mine in the past. Because I got the motivation to grow in life from my daughter.
>> However, I am happier now than in the past because I got the motivation to grow in life from my daughter.
My purpose in life relates to my daughter closely. :)
>> CORRECT
OR My daughter is a great factor why I know my purpose in life.
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