What is the most important thing in life?

2021-11-16 · 첨삭 강사 Faith

학생이 쓴 원문

I would have to say that there\'re too many in my life. First, The health. When I was young, I didn\'t know about it important. but now, I realized as getting a older, I must steadily work out. Second, The patience. Because Pendemic situation is now, There\'s no recruitment. So, I have to endure until the open recruitment comes out. and lastly, The personality. My parents emphasized to me, when I was young. So, I think about these things that are the most important.

강사 첨삭

You are right, [이름]! You should really take care of yourself. Thank you!-Faith-
I would have to say that there\'re too many in my life. 
>> I would have to say that there are too many in my life. 
First, The health. 
>> First is health.
When I was young, I didn\'t know about it important. 
>> When I was young, I didn\'t know about its importance. 
but now, I realized as getting a older, I must steadily work out. 
>> But now, I realized that as I am getting older, I must steadily work out. 
Second, The patience. 
>> Second is patience. 
Because Pendemic situation is now, There\'s no recruitment. 
>> Because of the pandemic situation now, there\'s no recruitment. 
So, I have to endure until the open recruitment comes out. 
>> So, I have to endure until recruitments reopen.
and lastly, The personality. 
>> And lastly is personality. 
My parents emphasized to me, when I was young. 
>> My parents emphasized this to me when I was young. 
So, I think about these things that are the most important.
>> So, I think that these things are the most important.

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