What is the most important thing that you would consider when choosing a job?
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Although I have to do work for maintaining my life, I don't think salary is the most important. If my salary is as similar as the lowest wage in law, I don't care about it. Then when I choosing a job, I consider in detail what I learn from my job and how the rest of my life changes about the experience from my job.
I'm very curious about everythings, so sometimes I choose my job to get skills and tips of my hobby. For example I'm interested in all bevereges such as tea, coffee, cocktail and so on. But those are too expensive to drink frequentrly. So I worked at a cafe and a bar. I learnt specifictly from my boss, because they are specailists and that's their job. Also I love my job, so I studied myself from books or internet. It made good result not only me but also my store.
And I try to choose a job that I had been before. Experience new things makes my life more abandontly.
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Colorful Thursday morning to you Ms. [이름]!
Wow, you did an excellent work today.
That was long enough for me to read! haha
Just kidding. ^^Anyway, I do appreciate every class that we have and that you are having your class with me.
Thank you very much.
And with regards to your homework, you did great in explaining your side and on what you have chose.
I will see you again later!
Have a great day ahead of you!
Take care!
Always,
Kathrine
Although I have to do work for maintaining my life, I don\'t think salary is the most important.
> Although I have to work/ I am working to maintain my life, I don\'t think that salary is the most important.
If my salary is as similar as the lowest wage in law, I don\'t care about it.
>> CORRECT
>> OR: If my salary is the same as the lowest wage indicated in the law, I still don\'t care.
Then when I choosing a job, I consider in detail what I learn from my job and how the rest of my life changes about the experience from my job. >> The if I will choose a job, I will consider in detail the things that I will learn from the job and it will change my life because of my experiences from it. I\'m very curious about everythings, so sometimes I choose my job to get skills and tips of my hobby.
>> I\'m very curious about everything, so I sometimes choose my job to get/acquire skills and have tips with regards to my hobby.
For example I\'m interested in all bevereges such as tea, coffee, cocktail and so on. >> CORRECT
But those are too expensive to drink frequentrly.>> CORRECT (***spelling-frequently)
So I worked at a cafe and a bar.
>> CORRECT
I learnt specifictly from my boss, because they are specailists and that\'s their job. >> I learn things specifically from my boss because he is a specialists and it\'s his job.
Also I love my job, so I studied myself from books or internet.>> I also love my job so I am studying through books or in the internet.
It made good result not only me but also my store. >> It will make a good result for me and also for the store. And I try to choose a job that I had been before.
>> And I will ty to choose a job which I had before.
Experience new things makes my life more abandontly. >> Experiencing new things makes my life more abundant.
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