What is the purpose of art? What are the reasons we visit art museums?
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What is the purpose of art? What are the reasons we visit art museums?
The purpose of art is expresstion myelf. Sometimes we cannot express when we meet some problems or social depression. So, some artists express their thoughts by their own art design. Actually, there are lots of artists in the whole world, and some of them live in district where poeple cannot tell truth by government.
Why we visit art museum? Frankly speaking, because of the growth of media, so there is no reason to visit there anymore. I think just watching their paintings by internet could be more convenient and cheaper. Nevertheless, Lots of people are visiting art museum because they can watch the real one, so it could be realistic than by internet.
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Like what we have discussed during the class, I agree that sometimes it\'s difficult for people to appreciate art because there are different interpretations of it.
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What is the purpose of art? What are the reasons we visit art museums?
>>CORRECT
The purpose of art is expresstion myelf.
The purpose of art is expresstion myelf.
>>The purpose of art is self expression.
Sometimes we cannot express when we meet some problems or social depression.
>>Sometimes, it\'s hard to express some problems or feelings of social depression.
So, some artists express their thoughts by their own art design.
>>CORRECT
Actually, there are lots of artists in the whole world, and some of them live in district where poeple cannot tell truth by government.
>>Actually, there are a lot of artist around the world, and some of them live in places where the government controls everything.
Why we visit art museum?
>>CORRECT
Frankly speaking, because of the growth of media,
>>OR: Honestly, because everything is available online
so there is no reason to visit there anymore.
>>There is no reason to visit the art museum anymore.
I think just watching their paintings by internet could be more convenient and cheaper.
>>I think looking at paintings online is more convenient and cheaper.
Nevertheless, Lots of people are visiting art museum because they can watch the real one,
>>Nevertheless, A lot of people are visiting the art museum because they want to see the actual painting
so it could be realistic than by internet.
>>because it\'s more realistic than the one online.
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