What is the thing that you are most proud of your family?

2014-07-07 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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I have two old brothers and no sisters. My mother and my whole family must have been delighted when she gave a birth of three sons because a boy was preferred over a girl that time. In the past and even today to some extents, the Korean society has deeply rooted in Confucianism. Confucian culture has dominated the society and the people’s perspective. Under the Confucian culture, it was imperative for a wife to deliver a boy who could carry on his family line. A woman could not succeed her family. Not delivering a boy was a valid reason for her to be kicked out of her house in old days. She had difficult time to raise her three sons. The worse thing was that she felt so lonely when the three sons became adults and they did not talk to her very often. Unlike daughters, sons tend to be less talkative and do not share the details of their daily routines with their mother or father. Above all, my parents have sacrificed their whole life for us. What they have done was all for us.

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Good afternoon and Happy Monday Sir [이름]! Thanks for always doing your essays to cheer me up! Hihihihi! I was surprised about the things your mentioned below. Especially the one that a woman can be kicked out of her house. I think most mothers have difficulty in raising a kid whether it is a boy or a girl. We should always be thankful for them for everything. My mother told me that whenever a woman gives birth to a child, half of her life is in danger. I am sure that you are really proud of your mom. Because she raised a great son like you. ^_^ Thank you again for inspiring me today. Talk to you very soon.  Teacher Nina   I have two old brothers and no sisters. >> I have two older brothers and no sisters. >> OR: I only have two older brothers. My mother and my whole family must have been delighted when she gave a birth of three sons because a boy was preferred over a girl that time. >> My mother and the whole family must have been delighted when she gave birth to three sons. Because a boy was preferred over a girl during that time. In the past and even today to some extents, the Korean society has deeply rooted in Confucianism. >> Correct! >> OR: In the past and even today to some extents, Korean society is based in Confucianism. Confucian culture has dominated the society and the people’s perspective. >> Correct! Under the Confucian culture, it was imperative for a wife to deliver a boy who could carry on his family line. >> Correct! A woman could not succeed her family. >> Correct! Not delivering a boy was a valid reason for her to be kicked out of her house in old days. >> Correct! >> OR: Not delivering a boy was a valid reason for her to be kicked out of her house during the old days. She had difficult time to raise her three sons. >> She had a difficult time to raise her three sons. >> OR: She had difficulty in raising her three sons. The worse thing was that she felt so lonely when the three sons became adults and they did not talk to her very often. >> The worse thing was that she felt so lonely when her three sons became audults and they didn\'t talk to her very often. Unlike daughters, sons tend to be less talkative and do not share the details of their daily routines with their mother or father. >> Correct! Above all, my parents have sacrificed their whole life for us. >> Correct! What they have done was all for us. >> What they have done was for all of us.

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