What is the thing that you are most proud of your family?

2015-10-19 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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Having a happy family won’t happen by itself. Like all other things, all family members should do their parts to build a happy family. When we make a family after getting married, a husband or a wife makes a typical mistake. Rather than accepting what he/she is, we tend to try to change him/her in a way that we like. However, people won’t change. People’s personalities, characters, and thoughts have been formed over 30 years, so they won’t change easily. Unless you are willing to change your ways in thinking and acting as your spouse wants, you shouldn’t compel him/her to change as we wish, either. In order to construct a happy family, each member should sacrifice to some extent. The key element in constructing a good relationship is respect others and sacrifice yourself. Being selfish is the most common cause of all sorts of conflicts. We seem to make an effort to be a good person to others, however, we often feel too comfortable and not mindful of behaving nicely to our family.

강사 첨삭

A fantastic Monday to you Sir [이름]!

How are you doing today?

I hope that you feel great and that the weather is nice in your city too.

You are right! All family members should make an effort to build a happy relationship.

In some cases, some members are too selfish and their pride is too high.

For some, it is difficult for them to accept their mistake.

Like what you mentioned: The key elements in constructing a good relationship are, respect for others and sacrifice yourself.

We should always be careful with how we react on something that we might regret afterwards.

Talk to you soon.

Take care.
Teacher Nina


Having a happy family won’t happen by itself.

>> correct

Like all other things, all family members should do their parts to build a happy family.

>> correct  

When we make a family after getting married, a husband or a wife makes a typical mistake.

>> correct

Rather than accepting what he/she is, we tend to try to change him/her in a way that we like.

>> correct

However, people won’t change.

>> correct

People’s personalities, characters, and thoughts have been formed over 30 years, so they won’t change easily.

>> correct

Unless you are willing to change your ways in thinking and acting as your spouse wants, you shouldn’t compel him/her to change as we wish, either.

>> correct

In order to construct a happy family, each member should sacrifice to some extent.

>> correct

The key element in constructing a good relationship is respect others and sacrifice yourself.

>> The key elements in constructing a good relationship are, respect for others and sacrifice yourself.

Being selfish is the most common cause of all sorts of conflicts.

>> correct

We seem to make an effort to be a good person to others, however, we often feel too comfortable and not mindful of behaving nicely to our family.

>> correct

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