What is the worst age to be and why?
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In my opinion, there is no answer. Because there is a lot of variables on that topic. every age have their own merits and demerits. To begin with, teenagers experience a lot of event about \"first\". So memories from when we were students are strong and impressive. Second, from 20s to 40, we have time to challenge something, make money, make our family. In this time, we act most independently, we could do whatever we want. Third, from 40s to 60s, we sacrifice our things for people who we love. For example, we have children to go their school, give our parents presents and money. It is painful for us but we can get happiness. Lastly, from 60s to death, we retire our job, are bereaved of spouse and friends. In this time we also make arrangements for death. we should get ready to die. You may think it is just bad. However, at this time, eventually, we would be free from a lot of responsibility and relationship. Anyway, I think the most important thing for us is doing our best now.
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>>Correct.
Because there is a lot of variables on that topic.
>>It is because there are a lot of variables on that topic.
every age have their own merits and demerits.
>>Every age has its own merits and demerits.
To begin with, teenagers experience a lot of event about \"first\".
>>To begin with, teenagers experience a lot of events about \"first\".
So memories from when we were students are strong and impressive.
>>So the memories when we were students were strong and impressive.
Second, from 20s to 40, we have time to challenge something, make money, make our family.
>>Second, from the ages of 20s to 40s, we have to face challenges, make money, and build our own family.
In this time, we act most independently, we could do whatever we want.
>>Correct.
Third, from 40s to 60s, we sacrifice our things for people who we love.
>>Third, in 40s to 60s, we learn to sacrifice things for the people we love and care about the most.
For example, we have children to go their school, give our parents presents and money.
>>For example, we let our children go to school and give our parents presents and money.
It is painful for us but we can get happiness.
>>It is not that easy for us, but we get satisfaction with those acts.
Lastly, from 60s to death, we retire our job, are bereaved of spouse and friends.
>>Lastly, when the age of 60s and onwards is reached, it\'s time for retirement and some feel bereaved.
In this time we also make arrangements for death.
>>In this time, we also make arrangements for death.
we should get ready to die.
>>Correct.
You may think it is just bad.
>>Correct.
However, at this time, eventually, we would be free from a lot of responsibility and relationship.
>>However, at this time eventually, we would be free from a lot of responsibilities and relationships.
Anyway, I think the most important thing for us is doing our best now.
>>Anyway, I think the most important thing is to do our best at the moment.
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