What is the worst news you have ever heard of or read about?
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Recently, the news here has been the worst in my life, so I would not like to read news or search the internet to read the news. Especially, killing or murders sound heart-breaking. Among the horrible news, one guy killed three persons of the family: mother, and two daughters. Even two dead persons didn’t know who the killer was. The man was one of the first daughter’s friends, and they knew each other through SNS. That means that they were not real friends offline, but the man insisted on meeting him to the daughter and she kept refusing it and she tried to escape from him. She didn’t give her address to him because she knew he seemed to be bizarre. For this reason, his anger grew, and he went to her house when her sister stayed home as if he were a delivery man. He killed the sister at first. After that, the mother came home, not knowing the happening, the man killed her, and he was waiting for the first daughter. When she came home, he killed her lastly. He was caught after a while.
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Recently, the news here has been the worst in my life, so I would not like to read news or search the internet to read the news.
>> Recently, the news here has been the worst in my life, so I would not like to read newspapers or search the internet to read news.
Especially, killing or murders sound heart-breaking.
>> Killings or murders sound heartbreaking especially.
Among the horrible news, one guy killed three persons of the family: mother, and two daughters.
>> Among the horrible news, one guy killed three family members: a mother and two daughters.
Even two dead persons didn’t know who the killer was.
>> Moreover, the two victims didn\'t know who the killer was.
The man was one of the first daughter’s friends, and they knew each other through SNS.
>> The man was the elder daughter\'s friend, and they knew each other through an SNS.
That means that they were not real friends offline, but the man insisted on meeting him to the daughter and she kept refusing it and she tried to escape from him.
>> That means that they were not real friends offline. The man insisted on meeting the daughter, but she kept refusing him, and she tried to escape from him.
She didn’t give her address to him because she knew he seemed to be bizarre.
>> This is a good sentence.
For this reason, his anger grew, and he went to her house when her sister stayed home as if he were a delivery man.
>> For this reason, his anger grew, so he went to her house, where her sister was, and pretended to be a delivery man.
He killed the sister at first.
>> He killed her sister first.
After that, the mother came home, not knowing the happening, the man killed her, and he was waiting for the first daughter.
>> After that, the mother came home not knowing what had happened. He killed her and waited for her elder daughter.
When she came home, he killed her lastly.
>> When she came home, he killed her last.
He was caught after a while.
>> This is a good sentence.
Hi, [이름]! Reading this gave me goosebumps. It\'s terrifying. I hope you don\'t get to hear or read these kinds of news every day.
Thanks for sharing!
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