What is true success?
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I once used to think about success seriously.
>>> Correct!
Because I wanted to succeed my life like everyone else, too, I planned my life tightly and tried hard to reach to the goal as soon as possible.
>>> Because I wanted to succeed in life like everyone else too, I planned for my life seriously and tried hard to reach my goals as soon as possible.
I always checked if I was on the right way to succeed but it didn\'t come to me easily.
>>> I always checked if I was on the right way to success but it didn\'t come to me easily.
I was getting tired chasing success and even didn\'t know when I was happy last time.
>>> I was getting tired chasing success and even didn\'t know when was the last time I was happy.
Then one day, I suddenly thought how I looked like a fool.
>>> Correct!
I seemed ridiculous only to follow the bright future every single day even though I wasn\'t happy at all at that moment.
>>> I seemed ridiculous to only follow the bright future every single day even though I wasn\'t happy at all.
How can a person who cannot feel happy in the present be happy in its future just because it has success.
>>> How can a person who cannot feel happy at present be happy in the future just because of success.
Why do I have to wait until the success comes to me and put up with hardships for later happiness?
>>> Correct!
I stopped chasing success and chose to live my present life taking all the fun out of life.
>>> Correct!
Honestly, I\'m still confused what\'s more important in the future or in the present but I can say for certain sure that only success doesn\'t bring me happiness.
>>> Honestly, I\'m still confused about what\'s more important in the future or at present but I can say for sure that success is not the only thing that can bring me happiness.
On the way to success, if you feel happy, I think you are the one who already get success.
>>> OR: While on the process of chasing success, if you feel happy, I think you are the one who get successful.
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