What is your biggest goal in life?
학생이 쓴 원문
My biggest goal in life is to be as career successful as possible. First of all, I can be independent in economics. If I see a beautiful dress or lovely wallet on the Internet that I like, I can freely buy it without permission from anybody. Secondly, I can do what I love the way I like. Traveling abroad in places I like such as Korea, the gorgeous Paris capital and rich Dubai city and eating every food I like. Moreover, by having a successful career, I can help everyone both physically and materially, especially my family. I can show gratitude to my parents in many ways but the best way is for my parents to see me having a good job.
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]!
You are so inspiring~
Continue reaching your goals!
- T. Rina
1. My biggest goal in life is to be as career successful as possible.
>> My biggest goal in life is to have a successful career.
2. First of all, I can be independent in economics.
>> CORRECT!
3. If I see a beautiful dress or lovely wallet on the Internet that I like, I can freely buy it without permission from anybody.
>> CORRECT!
4. Secondly, I can do what I love the way I like.
>> Secondly, I can do what I love the way I like to.
5. Traveling abroad in places I like such as Korea, the gorgeous Paris capital and rich Dubai city and eating every food I like.
>> CORRECT!
6. Moreover, by having a successful career, I can help everyone both physically and materially, especially my family.
>> CORRECT!
7. I can show gratitude to my parents in many ways but the best way is for my parents to see me having a good job.
>> CORRECT!
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