What is your dream house and where do you want it to be?

2022-06-15 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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My dream house is very large and high-quality apartment. Of course I want to get my own house, but there is a risk of thieves. And I need to pay a lot of money for owning my house, and also I can\'t enjoy some convenient systems in the apartments. Because of these reasons, I want to live in the apartment. But I want big and great one.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!  

Yes, we need to consider a lot of things before getting our own house or apartment. It should be suitable to our way of living. :) 

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My dream house is very large and high-quality apartment.
>> CORRECT

Of course I want to get my own house, but there is a risk of thieves.
>> Of course I want to get my own house, but there is a risk of thieves.

And I need to pay a lot of money for owning my house, and also I can\'t enjoy some convenient systems in the apartments.
>>I need to pay a lot of money if I own a house. I also can\'t enjoy some convenient systems in the apartments.

Because of these reasons, I want to live in the apartment.
>>Because of these reasons, I want to live in an apartment but I want it to be a big and great one. 

But I want big and great one.
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE. 

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