What is your dream in life?

2014-08-03 · 첨삭 강사 Myra

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What is your dream in life? I haven't thought about my dream in life, recently. Maybe threre are some reasons, I think. first, I am already over in the mid-fourty and I have family members to look for. besides, It's almost to impossible to change my present job. In conclusion, I want to be a happy co-worker, a nice father and a good husband.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Mr. [이름]!

Thank you for spending your time doing your homework.
Your effort is much appreciated :))
I\'m also glad for sharing your dreams with me.

Have a great day ahead!
__T.Myra (\")(^^,)

I haven\'t thought about my dream in life, recently.
>>CORRECT
OR>> These days, I haven\'t thought about my dreams in life.

Maybe there are some reasons, I think.
>> Maybe there are some reasons why.

first, I am already over in the mid-fourty.
>>First, I am already in my mid-forties.

and I have family members to look for.
>> CORRECT
OR>> I have my family to think and care for.

besides, It\'s almost to impossible to change my present job.
>>CORRECT
OR>> Besides, it\'s not possible to change my career.

In conclusion, I want to be a happy co-worker, a nice father and a good husband.

>> In conclusion, I want to be a happy employee, a kind father and a good husband.(Nice is not suitable to describe someone because it\'s too vague)

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