What is your dream job?
학생이 쓴 원문
My dream for the future is to travel the world. I want to experience different cultures and enjoy the happiness that comes from new challenges. That\'s why I have a habit of saving places I want to visit on my phone map whenever I see them on TV or YouTube
강사 첨삭
Hello Yu Li!
Thank you for your nice writing! You shared your dream clearly. Just a small tip: try to use “phone’s map” to show it belongs to your phone. Great job—keep practicing and writing more!
>>CORRECT!
I want to experience different cultures and enjoy the happiness that comes from new challenges.
>>CORRECT!
That\'s why I have a habit of saving places I want to visit on my phone map whenever I see them on TV or YouTube.
>>That\'s why I have a habit of saving places I want to visit on my phone\'s map whenever I see them on TV or YouTube.
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