What is your favorite footwear brand?

2019-10-02 · 첨삭 강사 Joylin

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My favorite shoe brand is Toms. They have selected \"ONE FOR ONE\" as their brand philosophy. It means that when a pair of shoes is sold, a pair of shoes will be donated to children in need. I love their philosophy, and I also was able to have a dream due to them. I dreamed that I will establish my own company to help people in need like Toms. Not only that, I love their simple design and comfortable shoes. This is why I like Toms most among the shoe brands.

강사 첨삭

Hi Chloe!
TOMS brand has a very practical goal. The owner must be really good-hearted.
Here are my corrections.
My favorite shoe brand is Toms. They have selected \"ONE FOR ONE\" as their brand philosophy.
>> Correct!
It means that when a pair of shoes is sold, a pair of shoes will be donated to children in need.
>> Correct!
I love their philosophy, and I also was able to have a dream due to them.
>>I love their philosophy, and I was able to have a dream because of them, too.
I dreamed that I will establish my own company to help people in need like Toms. Not only that, I love their simple design and comfortable shoes.
>> Correct!
This is why I like Toms most among the shoe brands.
>> This is why I like Toms the most among other shoe brands.

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