What is your favorite hobby? Why?

2022-10-06 · 첨삭 강사 Lyn

학생이 쓴 원문

Hello, my name is Heather👧. Today, I tell you about my favorite hobby🎈. I will tell you how much I\'m proud of my hobby. My favorite hobby is sewing clothes for dolls. I make a doll out of sticks and then I sew innerwear to outerwear. then, I sketch some hearts, spades, clovers, stars, and rainbows on the shirt. I\'m proud of my hobby because I can sew very well and that is a quite impressive thing, in my opinion. Anyways, I hoped I\'ll have more hobbies to tell you, but I\'d run out of seceret hobbies, don\'t you think? So, thats all for my presentation, and goodbye!😋

강사 첨삭

Good day, Heather! Wow! I\'m amazed that you know how to sew clothes for your dolls. Just do what makes you happy. I\'ll see you in class.~ T. Lyn
Hello, my name is Heather.
>>Correct.
Today, I tell you about my favorite hobby. 
>>Correct.
I will tell you how much I\'m proud of my hobby. 
>>Correct. Let me tell you how proud I am of my hobby.
My favorite hobby is sewing clothes for dolls. 
>>Correct.
I make a doll out of sticks and then I sew innerwear to outerwear. 
>>I make dolls out of sticks and sew both of their innerwear and outerwear.
then, I sketch some hearts, spades, clovers, stars, and rainbows on the shirt. 
>>Then, I sketch some hearts, spades, clovers, stars, and rainbows on their shirts.
I\'m proud of my hobby because I can sew very well and that is a quite impressive thing, in my opinion.
>>I\'m proud of my hobby because I can sew very all and that, in my opinion, is very impressive.
 Anyways, I hoped I\'ll have more hobbies to tell you, but I\'d run out of seceret hobbies, don\'t you think?
>>Anyway, I wish I had more hobbies to tell you but don\'t you think I\'ve run out of secret hobbies?
 So, thats all for my presentation, and goodbye!
>>This concludes my presentation and goodbye!

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