What is your favorite kind of drink?
학생이 쓴 원문
I like to drink alchol like Soju,beer and wine.
Especially, my favorite is beer.
There are many kinds of beer in Korea.
Some are made in Korea.
and the others are made in foreign countries.
Among them , my favorite beer is a budweiser made in USA.
Every time I drink beer , I feel freshness.
After playing sports , a can of beer is great.
If the price of liquor doubled, I feel so bad.
and I won't accept that situation.
and It will cause that the price of liquor will also double in a pub.
It makes our world chaos.
The government has to admit the advantages of liquor to our society.
If the government wants to increse the price of liquor,
they would have to do that gradually.
Like to increase the price 10 percent each year.
강사 첨삭
Hi there,
Thank you for sharing your thoughts about alcohol. Your sentences were very good! Keep up the good work. See you later!
-Camille-
I like to drink alcohol like Soju,beer and wine.
>>Correct
Especially, my favorite is beer.
Especially, my favorite is beer.
>> My favorite is beer.
There are many kinds of beer in Korea.
There are many kinds of beer in Korea.
>>Correct
Some are made in Korea.
Some are made in Korea.
>>Correct
and the others are made in foreign countries.
and the others are made in foreign countries.
>>And the others are made in foreign countries.
Among them , my favorite beer is a budweiser made in USA.
Among them , my favorite beer is a budweiser made in USA.
>>Correct
Every time I drink beer , I feel freshness.
Every time I drink beer , I feel freshness.
>> Every time I drink beer, I feel refreshed.
After playing sports, a can of beer is great.
>>Correct
If the price of liquor doubled, I feel so bad.
After playing sports, a can of beer is great.
>>Correct
If the price of liquor doubled, I feel so bad.
>>If the price of liquor doubled, I will feel so bad.
and I won't accept that situation.
and I won't accept that situation.
>>correct
and It will cause that the price of liquor will also double in a pub.
and It will cause that the price of liquor will also double in a pub.
>> And that will also cause the increase of price of liquors in pubs.
It makes our world chaos.
It makes our world chaos.
>> It will make our world chaotic.
The government has to admit the advantages of liquor to our society.
The government has to admit the advantages of liquor to our society.
>>Correct
If the government wants to increse the price of liquor,they would have to do that gradually.
If the government wants to increse the price of liquor,they would have to do that gradually.
>>Correct
Like to increase the price 10 percent each year.
Like to increase the price 10 percent each year.
>>Like for example, increasing the price 10percent each year.
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