What is your favorite movie/book character? Describe him/her as detailed as you can.

2018-07-02 · 첨삭 강사 Gracelyn

학생이 쓴 원문

I sincerely thank you for your praise^^ It gives me a a lot of courage to speak English well. Have a good day.^^ I like watching romantic comedy movies, but I don't like any actors. But there is only one person I admire. I read her autobiography. She is a figure skater and her name is Kim Yu-na. It has been ten years since I liked her. She gives me a lot of inspiration and courage. The reason why she is great is that Korea is not a figure-leading country. It was ony recognized by ability and became the best in the world. After each competition, Judgements changed the rules to disadvantage to Kim Yu-na in Japan, which sponsors many World Ice Federations. She has overcome such unreasonable situations and has continued to the Olympic champion in 2010. She is not only a sports player but also a modest character. She has a humble personality and donates a lot to help people in need. I want to raise my daughter as a great person like her.

강사 첨삭

Hello there Ms. [Name]. Thank you for sending in your essay.
You\'re very much welcome. ^^ It\'s my pleasure. Keep it up! ^^
I will talk to you tomorrow.
T. Gracelyn

I like watching romantic comedy movies, but I don\'t like any actors.
>>I like watching romantic comedy movies but I don\'t have favorite actors.
But there is only one person I admire.
>>correct
I read her autobiography.
>>correct
She is a figure skater and her name is Kim Yu-na.
>>correct
It has been ten years since I liked her.
>>correct
She gives me a lot of inspiration and courage.
>>correct
The reason why she is great is that Korea is not a figure-leading country.
>>correct
It was only recognized by ability and became the best in the world. 
>>correct
After each competition, Judgement changed the rules to disadvantage to Kim Yu-na in Japan, which sponsors many World Ice Federations.
She has overcome such unreasonable situations and has continued to the Olympic championship in 2010. 
>>correct
She is not only a sports player but also a modest character.
>>She is not only a sport player but she is also modest.
She has a humble personality and donates a lot to help people in need.
>>correct
I want to raise my daughter as a great person like her.
>>correct

파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.

다른 영어첨삭교정 보기

영어첨삭교정 ·