What is your favorite Seollal Holiday memory?

2023-01-26 · 첨삭 강사 Harmony

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My favorite Seollal Holiday memory is my first visit to my wife’s house on the lunar new year. After popping the question to then my girlfriend who is now my wife, I paid a visit to my wife’s house for the first time. If my memory serves me right, I enjoyed a ride along a lane covered with white snow because I, who was born and grew up in the southern port city, didn’t experience snow falling that much. Anyway, I had a wonderful time with my parents-in-law helped by my sisters-in-law who went there from each house to support me on purpose. I owed them a big favor. As a matter of fact, my parents-in-law wanted to marry her daughter to a primary school teacher because she is also an elementary school teacher. So I was told that they didn’t like my visit. I needed my sister-in-law\'s support and help to win their favor with me. Anyway, after that, I and my parents-in-law have gotten along with each other. Every time I see snow falling on the new year, I remember the time of heart-beating.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for sharing your favorite memory with me, Steve! It was a wonderful surprise to read a K-drama-esque occurrence kkk. ^^ I think it was very sweet of your sister-in-law to help you and for you to continue pursuing your parents-in-laws\' blessing. :)
~T.Harmony <3

My favorite Seollal Holiday memory is my first visit to my wife’s house on the lunar new year. 
>>  ...on Lunar New Year.
After popping the question to then my girlfriend who is now my wife, I paid a visit to my wife’s house for the first time. 
>> ...to my then girlfriend...
If my memory serves me right, I enjoyed a ride along a lane covered with white snow because I, who was born and grew up in the southern port city, didn’t experience snow falling that much. 
>> ...who was born and raised...
>> ...didn\'t experience snowfall that much.
Anyway, I had a wonderful time with my parents-in-law helped by my sisters-in-law who went there from each house to support me on purpose.
>> CORRECT!
I owed them a big favor. 
>> CORRECT!
As a matter of fact, my parents-in-law wanted to marry her daughter to a primary school teacher because she is also an elementary school teacher. 
>> CORRECT!
So I was told that they didn’t like my visit. 
>> CORRECT!
I needed my sister-in-law\'s support and help to win their favor with me. 
>> ...to win their favor of me.
Anyway, after that, I and my parents-in-law have gotten along with each other. 
>> ..., my parents-in-law and I...
Every time I see snow falling on the new year, I remember the time of heart-beating.
>> ...I remember the heart-beating moment.

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