What is your favorite tradition in South Korea?
학생이 쓴 원문
My favorite tradition is expressing my thanks to others because through it, I can make a friend more easily. Due to it is a tradition, it is one of my habits.  So, when I\'m thankful to others, I can express my thanks to them. Also, I like Korean floor heating system which is called \"ondol\" because through using it, I can stay at my home more warmly. Maybe, there is it in all Korean house. So, on the winter season, most of Koreans lie down and eat tangerines. It is the best moment on a day.
강사 첨삭
Hi Kimberly :)
That\'s a very interesting tradition. I wish we also had winter season here in the Philippines.
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My favorite tradition is expressing my thanks to others because through it, I can make a friend more easily.
>> CORRECT
Due to it is a tradition, it is one of my habits. 
>> Due to this tradition, it has became my habit as well.
So, when I\'m thankful to others, I can express my thanks to them.
>> So when I am thankful to others, I express it to them.
Also, I like Korean floor heating system which is called \"ondol\" because through using it, I can stay at my home more warmly.
>> Also, I like Korean floor heating system which is called \"ondol\" because I can stay warm at my home.
Maybe, there is it in all Korean house.
>> All Korean homes have this.
So, on the winter season, most of Koreans lie down and eat tangerines.
>> So during the winter season, most Korean lie down on the floor and eat tangerines.
It is the best moment on a day.
>>It is the best moment of the day.
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