What is your favorite way to spend a long holiday?

2025-01-24 · 첨삭 강사 Jewel

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I would like to leave to anywhere whenever coming a long holiday. Actually, I\'ve ever been to other places. But now, I can\'t do. There are several reasons for this. First, both my thought and the energies are not same, because I think I\'m getting older than before. Second, I frequently consist of traffic-jams. As you know, I\'ve got a little girl as our family. I think she get carsick when taking on the car. Also, my son is usually bored and give me some making headache during that situation. Last, as you saw previous paragraph, I should go to other places with my family. If It is possible for me to go on a trip alone, I might feel bored and loney. Anyway I will spend a long holiday happily and relax at home. For example, I want to watch movies at night with my son and the dog daughter until over midnight . And we can wake up late in the moring. I think we might be in the afternoon. I hope you spend peaceful holiday. Have a nice day.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Stella! I can feel you. While reading your homework, I felt like we share the same thoughts about holidays and traveling. Going on a trip with our family is wonderful, but sometimes, I just want to relax at home and rest during long holidays. ^^ Have a great Seollal!
~T. Jewel
I would like to leave to anywhere whenever coming a long holiday. 
>>I would like to go anywhere whenever a long holiday comes.
Actually, I\'ve ever been to other places. 
>>Actually, I\'ve been to other places before.
But now, I can\'t do. 
>>But now, I can\'t do that.
There are several reasons for this.
>>CORRECT
First, both my thought and the energies are not same, because I think I\'m getting older than before.
>>First, both my mindset and energy levels have changed because I feel like I\'m getting older.
Second, I frequently consist of traffic-jams. 
>>Second, I frequently get stuck in traffic jams.
As you know, I\'ve got a little girl as our family.
>>As you know, I have a little girl in our family now.
I think she get carsick when taking on the car. 
>>I think she gets carsick when riding in the car.
Also, my son is usually bored and give me some making headache during that situation.
>>Also, my son usually gets bored and gives me a headache in that situation.
Last, as you saw previous paragraph, I should go to other places with my family.
>>Lastly, as you saw in the previous paragraph, I go to other places with my family.
If It is possible for me to go on a trip alone, I might feel bored and loney.
>>If it were possible for me to go on a trip alone, I might feel bored and lonely.
Anyway I will spend a long holiday happily and relax at home. 
>>Anyway, I will spend the long holiday happily and relax at home.
For example, I want to watch movies at night with my son and the dog daughter until over midnight. 
>>For example, I want to watch movies at night with my son and our dog until after midnight.
And we can wake up late in the moring. 
>>CORRECT
I think we might be in the afternoon.
>>I think we might wake up in the afternoon.
I hope you spend peaceful holiday.
>>I hope you have a peaceful holiday.
Have a nice day.
>>CORRECT

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