What is your general view about work? Why?

2019-07-30 · 첨삭 강사 Elly

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When it comes to work itself, it can be a bless that gives us the energy of our life. If we should work for food or money, our life is miserable. I want to regard it as a reward for meaning of life. If we don\'t have work, our life is getting very poor and boring. People shoud keep working appropriately for our need which is beyond our basic essential desires.

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Hello [이름],

Thank you for sharing your thoughts today!

Have a nice day and talk to you later!

Teacher ELLY.

What is your general view about work? Why?

When it comes to work itself, it can be a bless that gives us the energy of our life.

>>When it comes to work in general, it can be a blessing that gives us the energy to live.

If we should work for food or money, our life is miserable.

>>If we should work for food or money, our life will be miserable.

I want to regard it as a reward for meaning of life.

>>I want to regard it as a reward and as part of the meaning of life.

If we don\'t have work, our life is getting very poor and boring.

>>If we don\'t work, our life will be boring and in a very poor state.

People shoud keep working appropriately for our need which is beyond our basic essential desires.

>>People should keep working appropriately for their needs which is beyond our basic essential needs.

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