What is your greatest achievement in joining a marathon?

2020-12-01 · 첨삭 강사 Elise

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Dear [Name], As you know, Marathon is very difficult challenge. so if I finish it, my feeing of success will be wonderful. I got it three years ago. At first I was wish. but I tried to run 10km short marathon and did it. so I tred it again and did it. so I tried to run 21 km at third time. My wife opposed it, but I did it and I got a license of the half course. this made me proud. I tried it 3 times more after that and I achieved all. My wife admitted my challenge, but she opposed to run full course.

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Hi [이름]!

Have a great day to you. Thank you for answering your homework.

Dear [Name],

As you know, Marathon is very difficult challenge. so if I finish it, my feeing of success will be wonderful. I got it three years ago.

>> As you know, Marathon is a very difficult challenge so if I finished it, my feeling of accomplishment will be wonderful. I got it three years ago.

At first I was wish. but I tried to run 10km short marathon and did it. so I tred it again and did it. so I tried to run 21 km at third time.

>> At first, It was just a wish so I tried to run a short 10km marathon and did it so I tried it again and surprisingly, I did it again so decided to run 21km on my third try.

My wife opposed it, but I did it and I got a license of the half course. this made me proud.

>> My wife opposed it, but I proved myself that I can do it and after a few months, I got my certificate for running half of the course and this made me really proud.

I tried it 3 times more after that and I achieved all. My wife admitted my challenge, but she opposed to run full course.

>> I tried it 3 times more after that and I was able to achieve all of it. My wife supported my passion but she opposed meto run full course.

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