What is your happiness?

2016-02-24 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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My happiness is being healthy, keeping a job, having my parents, playing tennis, and can have dinner with my family. When we get up on the bed in the morning and can walk out of the door, we should feel happy. Thinking of people who are on the death bed in the hospital or struggling even every second to survive from critical disease, our current life is a definitely blessing. Happiness is subjective so that you can feel happy or unhappy depending on how you think. Even with the same possession, people may feel differently and their satisfaction level is different. One might feel happy with the small piece of bread whereas some might feel unhappy even though they live in the mansion, wear diamonds, and drive a Porsche. When I’m getting old, I feel like my physical condition is not what it used to be. I feel I’m getting weaker and have some problems with my back, digestive system, joints, eyes, etc. However, I should accept it and feel happy about the fact that I’m still alive.

강사 첨삭

Great evening,Sir [이름]!

You are totally right! We should be happy because we are still alive.
We can still do a lot of things.
Like what you mentioned below there are some people who are suffering in the hospital and fighting for their life.

We should always be grateful for what we have.

We are so blessed to have our family, friends, job and so on.

Being healthy is the most important. We should make sure that we are careful with the things we eat, drink and do.

Thanks for a wonderful composition again.

See you in class.

Teacher Nina


My happiness is being healthy, keeping a job, having my parents, playing tennis, and can have dinner with my family.

>> correct

When we get up on the bed in the morning and can walk out of the door, we should feel happy.

>> correct

>> OR: When we can get out of bed in the morning and walk out of the door, we should feel happy.

Thinking of people who are on the death bed in the hospital or struggling even every second to survive from critical disease, our current life is a definitely blessing.

>> Thinking of people who are on the death bed in the hospital or struggling even every second to survive from critical disease, our current life is definitely a blessing.

Happiness is subjective so that you can feel happy or unhappy depending on how you think.

>> correct

Even with the same possession, people may feel differently and their satisfaction level is different.

>> correct

One might feel happy with the small piece of bread whereas some might feel unhappy even though they live in the mansion, wear diamonds, and drive a Porsche.

>> correct

When I’m getting old, I feel like my physical condition is not what it used to be.

>> correct

>> OR; As I am getting older, I feel like my physical condition is not that good as before.

I feel I’m getting weaker and have some problems with my back, digestive system, joints, eyes, etc.

>> correct

However, I should accept it and feel happy about the fact that I’m still alive.

>> correct

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