What is your happiness?

2016-11-15 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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I often feel stressed out when things do not go well, having conflicts with others, suffering from health problems, etc. Looking at myself, I rarely see me smiling or laughing. The average child laughs 300 to 500 times a day while the average adult laughs only about 15 times a day. I laugh one or two times a day or even less. You might complain that you don’t have anything or moments that make you smile or laugh. It could be true that we all are living in society that deprives us of laughs. Life is tough. We have to battle hard every day to stay afloat. However, giving a second thought, it is all up to us whether we can live a happy life or not. There are numerous things we can appreciate and feel happy. It is so fortunate that we can get up in the morning, smell fresh air, take a breath, drink a cup of coffee, and go to work. Walking on your own foot is not a thing that you can take it for granted. To someone, it is a miracle or a life time dream. Let’s be positive and be happy.

강사 첨삭

Hello there Sir [이름]. What a great composition. I can say that I laugh about three to four times I guess. It is because of my co-workers. They sometimes crack jokes before and after work. I sometimes believe that laughing makes people look young. See you in class. Thank you for your time and effort. Teacher Nina   I often feel stressed out when things do not go well, having conflicts with others, suffering from health problems, etc. >> correct Looking at myself, I rarely see me smiling or laughing. >> correct The average child laughs 300 to 500 times a day while the average adult laughs only about 15 times a day. >> correct I laugh one or two times a day or even less. >> correct You might complain that you don’t have anything or moments that make you smile or laugh. >> correct It could be true that we all are living in society that deprives us of laughs. >> Better: It could be true that we all are living in society that deprives us of laughing. Life is tough. >> correct We have to battle hard every day to stay afloat. >> correct However, giving a second thought, it is all up to us whether we can live a happy life or not. >> correct There are numerous things we can appreciate and feel happy. >> correct It is so fortunate that we can get up in the morning, smell fresh air, take a breath, drink a cup of coffee, and go to work. >> correct Walking on your own foot is not a thing that you can take it for granted. >> correct To someone, it is a miracle or a life time dream. >> correct Let’s be positive and be happy. >> correct

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