What is your ideal job? Why?
학생이 쓴 원문
I wish to the job which have work-life balance.
My body must have rest. I can\'t work all night long.
When I\'m tired, my body makes alarm first. If I don\'t rest at that time, I become sick.
I really don\'t want to brake health cycle.
If I\'m given very much wage, I may overcome a bunch of work.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]!
I am glad you answered this homework. Keep on practicing your English skills. Check your spelling when writing. Listening to English songs more often and reading English articles would also be helpful. :)
-T. Maine
I wish to the job which have work-life balance.
>>I wish to get a job that gives a work-life balance.
My body must have rest.
My body must have rest.
>>My body also needs some rest.
I can\'t work all night long.
>>Correct.
When I\'m tired, my body makes alarm first.
When I\'m tired, my body makes alarm first.
>>When I\'m tired, my body makes the alarm first.
If I don\'t rest at that time, I become sick.
>>If I don\'t take some rest at that time, I become sick.
I really don\'t want to brake health cycle.
I really don\'t want to brake health cycle.
>>I really don\'t want to break my health cycle.
If I\'m given very much wage, I may overcome a bunch of work.
If I\'m given very much wage, I may overcome a bunch of work.
>>If I\'m given a higher wage, I may overcome a bunch of work.
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