What is your ideal workplace?

2025-02-08 · 첨삭 강사 Gina

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In Korea, there is a funny saying, \"less work and earn a lot of money.\" Accordingly, it is considered an ideal workplace if three conditions are met. First, a job with a high salary. As many people think a job that can make a lot of money is a good job, I think it is an ideal job if you have a high salary. You can make extra money, but it\'s easy to work and a place with a lot of self-authority, right? Second, workplaces with a good welfare environment for employees. These days, a new word \"work-life balance\" is emerging in many Koreans. It is a compound word of work and balance, which means that they prefer a job where work and family and work and individual time. In addition, it would be nice if it was a work place that respects employees\' work-life balance and cares for employees. Thrid, a workplace with a free atmosphere. A free atmosphere is not a workplace that doesn\'t matter if you are rude to people. I\'m talking about a workplace where you can freely come up with ideas.

강사 첨삭

Hi! 

Wow! You gave me such nice answers. It would be so lovely to work in such a place. ^^ 

~ Teacher Gina


In Korea, there is a funny saying, \"less work and earn a lot of money.\"
>> In Korea, there is a funny saying that goes, \"Less work and earn a lot of money.\"

Accordingly, it is considered an ideal workplace if three conditions are met.
>> CORRECT.

First, a job with a high salary.
>> CORRECT.

As many people think a job that can make a lot of money is a good job, I think it is an ideal job if you have a high salary. 
>> CORRECT.

You can make extra money, but it\'s easy to work and a place with a lot of self-authority, right?
>> You can make extra money, have an easy workload, and a place with a lot of autonomy, right?

Second, workplaces with a good welfare environment for employees.
>> CORRECT.

These days, a new word \"work-life balance\" is emerging in many Koreans. 
>> These days, a new word,  \"work-life balance\" is emerging among many Koreans. 

It is a compound word of work and balance, which means that they prefer a job where work and family and work and individual time. 
>> It is a compound word of \"work\" and \"balance,\" meaning that people prefer a job where work, family, and personal time are balanced.

In addition, it would be nice if it was a work place that respects employees\' work-life balance and cares for employees.
>>  In addition, it would be nice if it were a workplace that respects employees\' work-life balance and cares for them.

Thrid, a workplace with a free atmosphere.
>> Third, a workplace with a free atmosphere.

A free atmosphere is not a workplace that doesn\'t matter if you are rude to people. I\'m talking about a workplace where you can freely come up with ideas.
>> CORRECT.

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