What is your ideal world that you want to live in?

2015-07-13 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

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Sometimes, I imagine what will happen in 2050. I think we can talk with robots or pets. Everyone knows sharing our opinions is important.So these days, many schools try to elt students discuss. Two months ago, in Korean class, I learned about how to discuss. My korean teacher gave a time to decide the topic and debate with friends. However we could not do anything. Beacause we didn`t know the exact rules and we felt weird we were not use to doing it.We should learn the method of discussion and keep practicing it. In freind relationship, friends are equal footing.Than means, between friends we don`t need to try to read other friedn`s mind. In my case, I always tried to do it so I was tired. Fortunately next year, I meat another friends so I overcame it. And I felt comfortable and also at some time I often met my friends that made me uncomfortable. When I have a problem such as friendship or grade, I talk about it only to mom.

강사 첨삭

Good morning, Ji Yu. Long time no see! I waited for you during your vacation. Why didn\'t you meet me?TT.TT Always take care of yourself!^^~~Teacher Erine~~ Sometimes, I imagine what will happen in 2050. >>Correct I think we can talk with robots or pets. >>Correct Everyone knows sharing our opinions is important. >>Correct So these days, many schools try to elt students discuss. >> So these days, many schools try to let students discuss. Two months ago, in Korean class, I learned about how to discuss. >> Two months ago, in a Korean class, I learned how to discuss. My korean teacher gave a time to decide the topic and debate with friends. >>My korean teacher gave time to decide about a topic and debate with friends. However we could not do anything. >>Correct Beacause we didn`t know the exact rules and we felt weird we were not use to doing it. >>Because we didn`t know the exact rules and we felt weird because we were not used to doing it. We should learn the method of discussion and keep practicing it. >> Correct In freind relationship, friends are equal footing. >> In friendship, friends have equal footing. Than means, between friends we don`t need to try to read other friedn`s mind. >>That means, among friends, we don`t need to try to read other friend`s mind. In my case, I always tried to do it so I was tired. >> Correct Fortunately next year, I meat another friends so I overcame it. >> Fortunately next year, I will meet other friends so I can overcome it. And I felt comfortable and also at some time I often met my friends that made me uncomfortable. >> And I will feel comfortable and also, I will often meet my friends that made me uncomfortable. When I have a problem such as friendship or grade, I talk about it only to mom. >>Correct.

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