What is your kind of success?
학생이 쓴 원문
Well, when I was young, I thought making a lot of money was successful, but now I think maintaining a comfortable life is successful.
When I was young, I thought that getting a stable job and making a lot of money was successful.
I think I wanted to be a person who earns a lot of money and buys what I want to have, eats what I want, buys a good house and car, and gives my parents pockey money.
But as I grew up a little, I don\'t think making a lot of money is a success.
Because I realized that everyday happiness is more important.
I\'ve had a hard time, I\'ve difficulty to finding a job, and I\'ve felt deep depression and fatigue, so I think my daily life and happiness are more precious.
Therefore, I think it is is a success to feel happy in everyday life and maintain a comfortable life that does not get worse.
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]!
When I was younger, I thought success was all about money and comfort, just like you. As I mature, it becomes more about being happy and content with what I have. I suppose the definition of the word varies with age and situation. But, at the end of the day, I believe people simply want to live a happy and healthy life.
Chammy
Well, when I was young, I thought making a lot of money was successful, but now I think maintaining a comfortable life is successful.
When I was young, I thought that getting a stable job and making a lot of money was successful.
When I was young, I thought that getting a stable job and making a lot of money was successful.
>>Correct
I think I wanted to be a person who earns a lot of money and buys what I want to have, eats what I want, buys a good house and car, and gives my parents pockey money.
I think I wanted to be a person who earns a lot of money and buys what I want to have, eats what I want, buys a good house and car, and gives my parents pockey money.
>>I think I wanted to be a person who earns a lot of money and buys what I want to have, eats what I want, buys a good house and car, and gives my parents pocket money.
But as I grew up a little, I don\'t think making a lot of money is a success.
Because I realized that everyday happiness is more important.
But as I grew up a little, I don\'t think making a lot of money is a success.
Because I realized that everyday happiness is more important.
>>Correct
I\'ve had a hard time, I\'ve difficulty to finding a job, and I\'ve felt deep depression and fatigue, so I think my daily life and happiness are more precious.
I\'ve had a hard time, I\'ve difficulty to finding a job, and I\'ve felt deep depression and fatigue, so I think my daily life and happiness are more precious.
>>I\'ve had a hard time, I\'ve difficulty finding a job, and I\'ve felt deep depression and fatigue, so I think my daily life and happiness are more precious.
Therefore, I think it is is a success to feel happy in everyday life and maintain a comfortable life that does not get worse.
Therefore, I think it is is a success to feel happy in everyday life and maintain a comfortable life that does not get worse.
>>Correct
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