What is your long-term goal?
학생이 쓴 원문
My goal is to become an entrepreneur.
Actually, I was very impressive from Toms, one of the famous shoe brands.
They use \"One For One\", every time a pair of shoes is sold, a pair is donated to children in need.
I want to be an executive who pursues not only business interests but benefit for everyone like Toms.
By establishing my own company I will earn money a lot, and I will share my money in need.
I will go a variety of countries because of my business, and I will seat in a first seat every time.
I will make volunteer works in my company to help poor people. I will buy volunteers airplane seats to go to help comfortably.
강사 첨삭
Wow, I really wish you to be successful someday so that you will be able to do accomplish this goal ^^
Stick to your dream, Chloe! :)
- Teacher Debbie
My goal is to become an entrepreneur.
>> correct
Actually, I was very impressive from Toms, one of the famous shoe brands.
Actually, I was very impressive from Toms, one of the famous shoe brands.
>> Actually, I am very impressed to Toms, one of the famous shoe brands.
They use \"One For One\", every time a pair of shoes is sold, a pair is donated to children in need.
They use \"One For One\", every time a pair of shoes is sold, a pair is donated to children in need.
>> They have this promo called \"One For One\" where every time a pair of shoes is sold, another pair is donated to children in need.
I want to be an executive who pursues not only business interests but benefit for everyone like Toms.
I want to be an executive who pursues not only business interests but benefit for everyone like Toms.
>> I want to be an executive who pursues not only business interests but benefits for everyone as well like Toms.
By establishing my own company I will earn money a lot, and I will share my money in need.
By establishing my own company I will earn money a lot, and I will share my money in need.
>> By establishing my own company I will earn a lot of money , and I will share my money to those in need.
I will go a variety of countries because of my business, and I will seat in a first seat every time.
>> I will go to a variety of countries because of my business, and I will have the business seat every time.
I will make volunteer works in my company to help poor people. I will buy volunteers airplane seats to go to help comfortably.
I will make volunteer works in my company to help poor people. I will buy volunteers airplane seats to go to help comfortably.
>> I will make volunteer works in my company to help poor people. I will buy the volunteers their airplane seats to help them travel comfortably.
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