What is your major and why did you choose that major?
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I majored in Finance Investment. I took it up at university of Finance and Economics in shanghai, china. However, even since I was young, I’ve always been passionate about programming and data study. So, after graduating from the university, I worked business development analyst at previous company as well as studying programming in order to make myself grow more in the filed of data.
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What is your major and why did you choose that major?
I majored in Finance Investment.
>>> CORRECT
I took it up at university of Finance and Economics in shanghai, china.
>>> I took it up at the University of Finance and Economics in Shanghai, China.
However, even since I was young, I’ve always been passionate about programming and data study.
>>> However, ever since I was young, I’ve always been passionate about programming and data study.
So, after graduating from the university, I worked business development analyst at previous company as well as studying programming in order to make myself grow more in the filed of data.
>>> So, after graduating from the university, I worked as a business development analyst at previous company. I also studied programming in order to make myself grow more in the filed of data.
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