What is your most dangerous experience in life?
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One thing popped up when I was in Australia.
I went to a river to cross for three days. My friends and I rented a canoe and packed some camp equipment. At the river, human hands made nothing, and we just held a map that someone drew. We ought to freely go canoeing for 3days without a guide, GPS, navigation system or motor boat but the silly map.
The weather was so lovely and clear. Well, it was scorching, but I had already got used to the weather there. And the river had quite enough current because it was at the end of the wet season. So it rained a lot for the past few months, yet draught. It was fine for canoeing.
It happened at the very beginning, about 30mins after we left the bank.
But I was nervous. This was my first time canoeing on the vast river, especially for a few days, so I was quite a bit stupid at the beginning of the journey. I needed some more trials to start.
Well, however, the current never let me as I wanted to.
to be continued...
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Hi [이름]!
I would love to hear the rest of it tomorrow. Hahaha!
One thing popped up when I was in Australia.
The weather was so lovely and clear.
It happened at the very beginning, about 30mins after we left the bank.
to be continued.
>> One thing that popped up in my mind and that is when I was in Australia.
I went to a river to cross for three days.
>> I crossed a river for 3 days.
My friends and I rented a canoe and packed some camp equipment.
>> CORRECT
At the river, human hands made nothing, and we just held a map that someone drew.
>> There were no man made things there. We just held a map the someone drew.
We ought to freely go canoeing for 3days without a guide, GPS, navigation system or motor boat but the silly map.
>> CORRECT
The weather was so lovely and clear.
>> CORRECT
Well, it was scorching, but I had already got used to the weather there.
>> CORRECT
And the river had quite enough current because it was at the end of the wet season.
>> CORRECT
So it rained a lot for the past few months, yet draught.
>> It was raining for the past few months, yet it was still draught.
It was fine for canoeing.
>> Everything was fine when we were canoeing.
It happened at the very beginning, about 30mins after we left the bank.
>> CORRECT
But I was nervous.
>> Although, I was nervous at that time.
This was my first time canoeing on the vast river, especially for a few days, so I was quite a bit stupid at the beginning of the journey.
>> CORRECT
I needed some more trials to start.
>> CORRECT
Well, however, the current never let me as I wanted to.
>> However, the current never let me have the control that I wanted to.
>> However, the current never let me have the control that I wanted to.
to be continued.
>> To be continued.
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