What is your most memorable travel?
학생이 쓴 원문
My most memorable travel was my visit to the United States last April. After I retired, I went to my daughter`s house In L.A with my husband and my son for about 24 days. We went to Yosemite National Park and Death Valley. The scenery was very beautiful and wonderful. I was very happy on this trip with my family.
강사 첨삭
Hello, Jane!
Twenty four days in the United States is almost like a month. Since it is a huge piece of land, that time may not even be enough. However, spending time with your daughter and son is all you need. As you mentioned in class before, this vacation was a blast.
I hope that you and your family will have time to be there again all together.
You did a perfect job in writing this composition. Continue doing an excellent job.
See you tomorrow in class.
-T. Donna~
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Or: My most memorable travel was my visit to the United States last April. After I retired, I went to my daughter`s house In L.A with my husband and my son for about 24 days. We went to Yosemite National Park and the Death Valley. The scenery was very beautiful and wonderful. I was very happy on this trip with my family.
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