What is your most vivid memory of the home where you grew up?

2016-07-24 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

학생이 쓴 원문

I lived in a small cozy house when I was a kid. There were two rooms in my house. In those days, most households suffered from the lack of food. Although I don’t remember exactly, my grandparents seemed to borrow some rice and wheat to go through the cold winter until a new harvest season came. In the small room, I think 4 or 5 family members lived together. At the upper corner of the room, there was a sorghum straw made bin that was quite large and fully filled with sweet photos. They were consumed in lieu of rice. When it was cold, we put the sweet photos in the piled snow for a while and peeled and ate them without cooking when we were fed up with eating cooked photos. We felt it was delicious because there were no other snacks at that time. Recalling those days, we lived in poverty and it was tough to live. We had to worry about the next meal. However, my parents and grandparents sacrificed their lives and loved us so much. It was the thing that happened only 40 years ago.

강사 첨삭

Hello there Sir [이름]!

Happy weekend. ^.^ How are you?

How\'s the weather there?

I appreciate that you shared these stories with me.

I know that it was tough but because of that experience, you strived hard to become successful.

You are really an inspiring person.

Have a good day.

Teacher Nina


I lived in a small cozy house when I was a kid. 

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There were two rooms in my house.

>> correct

In those days, most households suffered from the lack of food.

>> correct

Although I don’t remember exactly, my grandparents seemed to borrow some rice and wheat to go through the cold winter until a new harvest season came.

>> correct

In the small room, I think 4 or 5 family members lived together.

>> correct

At the upper corner of the room, there was a sorghum straw made bin that was quite large and fully filled with sweet photos.

>> Did you mean: At the upper corner of the room, there was a sorghum straw made bin that was quite large and fully filled with sweet potatoes.

They were consumed in lieu of rice.

>> correct

When it was cold, we put the sweet photos in the piled snow for a while and peeled and ate them without cooking when we were fed up with eating cooked photos. 

>> Did you mean: When it was cold, we put the sweet potatoes in the piled snow for a while, peeled and ate them without cooking when we were fed up with eating cooked photos. 

We felt it was delicious because there were no other snacks at that time.

>> correct

Recalling those days, we lived in poverty and it was tough to live.

>> correct

We had to worry about the next meal.

>> correct

However, my parents and grandparents sacrificed their lives and loved us so much.

>> correct

It was the thing that happened only 40 years ago.

>> correct

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